After a little encouragment I decided to try and refine the song a bit by rearranging the drums and changing the mix up a bit and (etc). Then I added some lyrics... well, to the chorus so far.
I...think this is getting somewhere? It's still super early stages, I'm still not sure if this is the right way to mix Lorelei for this, but at least it's something.
Here's the (current) lyrics for the curious:
Unbreak my heart
carry me down
out of this doom
Why apologize,
just to start a fight?
Drowning me again, again, again.
Smash it all again.
I keep saying this isn't LatG... See, I keep telling myself I want LatG to be really upbeat (okay, Rain isn't a good example, I admit). So...I dunno about the tone on this one.
At the same time, LatG is kind of about my feelings on things and, god, lemme tell ya, the way this song is going....it is most certainly about things I am facing (and many, if not all, folks in the queer community are facing) so I'm like...
lol, I dunno. Perhaps it's just hitting too close to home and that's why I am not sure. I guess I'm kind of on the fence about it at this point. But that's def a shift from my early thoughts where I was just kinda like "no".

