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Writer, TF Finatic, Recohoster, and Game dev. Wasnt able to post here as much as I liked, but I'll miss it and all of yall. Till we meet again, friends!


mrhands
@mrhands

Forever thinking about this tweet thread with game writing exercises from Katie Chironis, currently a Principal Designer at Bungie, previously the Design Director at Riot Games. If you can do these game-writing exercises well, you are a God-tier narrative designer, and I will move Heaven and Earth to work with you.

(Yes, I'm doing narrative today, why do you ask??)


sofsh
@sofsh

(Important note: I don't really have any game writing experience, so these probably aren't super good)

(Also, as it turns out these took me A While to answer so I just got through the first two before I decided to do something else.)


ONE:
1: "One of us will fall"
2: "Be not afraid"
3: "Our souls shall burn"
4: "See you in Valhalla"
5: "A good attempt"
6: "Witness my experience"
7: slightly seductive chuckle
8: "We march!"
9: "To me, my allies"
10: "A valiant death"
11: "Glory everlasting!"
12: "A wondrous battle"
13: "Rest... in death"
14: "A fiery one, aren't you"
15: "As bright as the burning sun"
16: "I'll claim you for mine"
17: "You have more to give"
18: "The last thing you'll see... has come"
19: "Forgive me, is that all?"
20: "The brilliance of my blade-work outshines my looks" (I was able to fit this in 3 seconds, testing it)
21: (Okay I did 20 now for a joking reference one) "Seven shadows cast, seven fates foretold, yet at the end of the broken path lies death, and death alone"

TWO:
1: (Gray) Cadenza Mk4: The basic model of the Cadenza line of motorcycles. Sleek, and built for speed.
2: (Tan-ish Brown) Old Reliable: Newer than most models despite its name, it attempts to appear retro to appeal to an older audience. Fans of the aesthetic don't seem to mind.
3: (Gold) Luxury 11: Although clearly meant to attract rich buyers, with how hot gold gets, along with how easily it dents, it takes a conscientious driver to not turn it into a wreck.
4: (Red) Comet Blur: Everyone knows red doesn't really make it go faster. But with this eye-popping color, it may turn enough heads to slow everyone else down.
5: (blue-light blue gradient) Ocean Explorer: Rumor has it that research into an aquatic motorcycle failed to bear fruit, so the chassis was refitted onto a standard model to cut losses.
6: (Yellow and Black) Beesting: With honey instead of vinegar, this motorcycle really feels like it flies compared to its competitors, yet still manages to give off an aura of danger.
7: (shades of green) Verdant Slide: Although noticeably more eco-friendly than any other motorcycle, every purchase helps Humming Motors plant a single tree, which is about as green as the tires on this bike.
8: (Black) Sleek Mk4: Although one of the most widely manufactured Cadenza mk4 motorcycles, demand has turned it into a luxury item of sorts, with many scalpers buying several with the hopes to sell them for more than they're worth.
9: (Two shades of Purple) Ghostly Mist: With the highest rate of crashes per rider of any Cadenza motorcycles, this motorcycle has a reputation for being cursed. Given production slowed with the rise of these rumors, its hard to put the rumor to a test... Although, it seems the rumor is a selling point for some.
10: (White) Pure Mk4: This white motorcycle gives off an "arctic" feel to some, although its rare to see one on the road. Suited only those who take the high road or are willing to show off mud stains with pride.
11: (Orange) Sunset Rider: Marketed as if it were a "leisure" motorcycle, many find its far too powerful for that to be an accurate description. Still, for those seeking the feeling of riding on an open road at sunset at any time of day, it'd be hard to do worse.
12: (Silver) Cadenza Mk5: Named as such to give it a "futuristic" and "advanced" feel, this model is actually part of the Cadenza Mk4 series. Given how this will disrupt the naming pattern for the next series, as well as the ongoing litigation for false advertising, many question whether this was a wise marketing decision.
13: (Pink) Petal Lash: The petal motif emblazoned on the side seems to appeal to those who want to throw themselves into a field of flowers as fast as possible. Although quite nice, some blame the name sounding like "crash" for its low popularity
14: (Yellow and Blue) Lightning Flash: A motorcycle that claims to be "hypercharged" as well as highlighting how it "embodies speed." In reality, its the same as any other Cadenza mk4 model, aside from a brighter display for the speedometer.
15: (Black and Silver with a hint of Red) Cadenza Custom: A Cadenza Mk4 with a personalized paint job, with the goal of bringing all of its details out in its fullest. Although not too different from standard models, many wouldn't pass up the opportunity to personalize
16: (Brown, Gray, and Black) Rugged Roader: A Cadenza Mk4 designed to bring its offroad capabilities to the forefront of the mind. Fittingly, the warranty on this model is a year longer than normal.
17: (Black and Blue) Slick Electric: A special version of the Cadenza Mk4, with a cyber-space motif. Seems to glow slightly in the dark, although that can be hard to see with the headlights.
18: (Emerald and Sapphire) Precious Jewels: A luxury version of the Cadenza Mk4. "A diamond in the rough" the marketing says, although you'd be hard pressed finding anything rough about this model (or anything diamond).
19: (Glowing white) Holy Light: A mystical motorcycle, wreathed in a golden glow. One could almost swear the rumbling of the engine was a chorus of angels.
20: (Black and Red, glowing) Demonic Call: Legend has it this is a motorcycle born from the pits of hell. Guaranteed to not eat your soul, although nothing is said about any other souls.


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in reply to @mrhands's post:

currently Principal Designer at Bungie

entry TWO: 20 different motorcycles with an 80 word blurb, identical models

YEAH THAT TRACKS

no I'm not annoyed at the launch seasons of D2 being stuffed full of carbon copy sparrows and ships, why do you ask

(ed: I'm not blaming her specifically, mind you)

Yeah, this exercise hits a little too close to home for me too. 😅 Many, many games face the "motorcycle problem" right before they go gold. E.g., game design figured out the progression loop sucks, and production already fired the art contractors. So in a Hail Mary, some designer duplicated the motorcycle 20x. And the only thing we can change is the color. But it's fine, narrative will figure it out!!

In that specific case, I always suspected the duplication/reskinning was artificial padding demanded by the Activision-Blizzard side of the equation in order to drive up the rarity of other items in the associated drop pool(s) at the time, rather than one put in place by Bungie themselves. But I've never dug into it too deeply to be sure, so I don't want to excuse bad management on Bungie's part (which has definitely been the case!) by blaming bad management on their then-publisher's part... 😅

Ah well, at least it's not as bad as it was with Anthem. Great concept and core gameplay, but one gun model per weapon class (with some greebles added, maybe) and all difference was in the textures. Such a waste of potential, that one. 😔

I am suddenly flooded with empathy for every game that features Fire, Ice, Water, Stone, Frost (different from Ice!), Ancient, Monster, Mutant, and Plant motorcycles

oh god that's only 9 we're not even halfway

uhhh... Space, Robot, Dark, Blessed, Cursed, Night (different from Dark!) Ghost, Magical, Gold, Ocean (different from Water!), and Standard.

The motorcycle one actually seems fairly easy because you could babble about how, for example, it looks identical to the lower tier one but this specific production line used higher-quality steel for the engine block due to some sort of logistical embargo and as such it has become legendary among collectors. It would read identical to how a lot of car nerds talk about the interests.

Referencing enthusiast detail and history was my first thought as well! It would require losing myself for many hours listening to nerds info dump an unfamiliar subject, but that's just Tuesday...

My dad has a car that was painted a specific color for a limited production run, so I could see some of the colors being styled as that. "This particular vermillion bike had only 1000 produced in 2025 to match the unusual sky color during the Solarclysm event."

Others could just talk about some of the design choices behind the colors ("Marketing showed clients felt red bikes went faster, despite no difference being found in testing") or even to distinguish knock-offs ("The actual Thundercycle never came in ecru, only the Eggworks knock-offs - visually identical but manufactured more cheaply abroad - did.")

Still, I wonder if I could manage more than 20 that way... XD

Me, the sort of person who will obsessively read ALL of that shit to later summarize in a fan wiki only to have edit wars about it with 7 specific other people for all of eternity, forming absolutely legendary bouts of hatred for people whose online handles are BillCat1928734 and TheLegendaryHero_.

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