Fenrir Cerebellion

1. Use the passive voice.

What? What are you talking about, “don’t use the passive voice”? Are you feeling okay? Who told you that? Come on, let’s you and me go to their house and beat them with golf clubs. It’s just grammar. English is full of grammar: you should go ahead and use all of it whenever you want, on account of English is the language you’re writing in.

2. Use adverbs.

Now hang on. What are you even saying to me? Don’t use adverbs? My guy, that is an entire part of speech. That’s, like—that’s gotta be at least 20% of the dictionary. I don’t know who told you not to use adverbs, but you should definitely throw them into the Columbia river.

3. There’s no such thing as “filler”.

Buddy, “filler” is what we called the episodes of Dragon Ball Z where Goku wasn’t blasting Frieza because the anime was in production before Akira Toriyama had written the part where Goku blasts Frieza. Outside of this extremely specific context, “filler” does not exist. Just because a scene wouldn’t make it into the Wikipedia synopsis of your story’s plot doesn’t mean it isn’t important to your story. This is why “plot” and “story” are different words!

Monster who thinks — and looks like — they might be dead...

When he rolls out of the niche in the catacomb, the drop to the floor chokes a groan out of him. He’s breathing but he’s not sure he’s supposed to be, not sure he needs to be. The air is musty but dry, it makes him choke again.

When he realizes where he is, newfound not sure of why supersedes the not sure of breathing.

Up the wall, the distinctively larger niche now empty of him is surrounded by niches not empty of their decidedly human remains. He’s hardly human. He shakes off the dust and shambles away.

Free from the bowels of the earth, the first creatures taken any liking to him are crows, flies, and coyotes—those that eat carrion. The first person he comes across makes holy gestures and begs a quick death for their loved ones. The first calm surface of water that lets him take a good look at himself makes him doubt his laugh at the person’s reaction.

Hardly human, might be remains.

temptation to fix up Rotten Black Smoke for posting, strong. Some good words in there. Some good descriptions of clothing on fire and the backs of buses in there

By my count, Jared should have like, four years experience driving, minimum.

I like to imagine they're singing the Eagles, Take It Easy or maybe Witchy Woman.
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You&& (working title) is a queer novella about when home is other people, including the monsters lurking in the woods. Check out the about page here. You&& is a sequel to Sometimes The Mountain Buries You.

Open season starts in late September for just about everything that has an open season in this region. School starts in early September, so it's the weekend when Heather and her son Jared are picking their way towards the service road from a venture deep into the backcountry. They weren't planning on bagging anything this trip out—rather checking for moose, deer, and elk activity—so the intent behind the rifle in Heather's hands is inclined towards safety.

Heather's been hunting since she was just a couple years younger than Jared is now, and Jared since a couple years ago. Heather's been in woods like these for as long as she can remember, and Jared has been in these exact woods his entire not-quite-teenaged life. They traverse the uneven brush with ease and confidence and heavy footfalls of intentionally making noise.

The last thing they wanted was to have to wait out an obstinate bear that wouldn't budge between them and the truck on the service road. Again.

links and search terms from writing 'Open season starts in late September for just about everything that has an open season in this region'.

• https://a100.gov.bc.ca/pub/acat/public/viewReport.do?reportId=22560 "Report: BC Hunting and Trapping Regulations Synopsis (Synopses) 1929 to current and LEH Regulations Synopsis 2004 - current."
• what genre the Eagles are considered

If you're into graphic design and information presentation I recommend checking out the BC Game Regulations 1962-63 and BC Hunting Regulations Synopsis 1971-72 pdfs from the linked report.