dyke - freaks please interact - bearer of the curse (desire to make art)



I believe firmly in ... Not "less is more", exactly but. letting things go unsaid. For example.

Before:

The dress Saffron was trying on was the one where she used me as a decoy to get away with stealing it. She strolled off and I ended up cuffed and face down on the concrete. Picked gravel out my teeth for a week afterwards.

After:

Saffron was trying on one of her nicer dresses, the one she stole by using me as a decoy. I had to pick gravel out my teeth for a week afterwards.

Do you see the difference? Really it's only the removal of one sentence. But now there's a space for implication.


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