shel

The Transsexual Chofetz Chaim

Mutant, librarian, poet, union rabble rouser, dog, Ashkenazi Jewish. Neuroweird, bodyweird, mostly sleepy.


I write about transformative justice, community, love, Judaism, Neurodivergence, mental health, Disability, geography, rivers, labor, and libraries; through poetry, opinionated essays, and short fiction.


I review Schoolhouse Rock! songs at @PropagandaRock


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Writing fiction prose is hard because I don't want to be "race blind" and never describe the skin tone of characters but I also don't just wanna write "She's Black" or "Her skin is brown" like that's boring and feels weird. So then the alternative is to always find ways to reference skin in ways that both reveal skin tone and says something about the character and add to their vibe. Like "her dark skin was ashy and in need of moisturizing" showing that a character neglects their self-care and giving a vibe of being stressed or overworked, but also casually referencing that they are dark skinned. Or you can use a reference object like "her skin glistened like a polished sandstone" and now we have a sense that the skin tone is "like sand" but it also gives an impression of being very polished, very put together.

But sometimes when trying to find a good reference object for a character that gives both a vibe and a color, I end up finding images that fit but would make awful prose to reference.

Today, that reference object is "Her skin was a deep dusty brown, like a 17,000 yr old sandstone oil lamp discovered at the caves of Lascaux, France"

Like, no, that is not going to work. I need to find something more normal.


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It’s hard. What I’ve been doing recently is talking about race through experiences, like in my recent short story I called one of the astronauts “the first astronaut of Hmong descent” (and talked a bit about that experience for her) and then I had her comment on the other two characters’ whiteness. Of course that only works when the story is set adjacent to real life. 🤔 (Description in general feels so clunky and unnatural to me, lol, I have to force myself into it.)

What I’m hitting is almost the opposite issue from being too far from reality. The novel is set in Philly and the genre is romcom. Most people in Philly aren’t white, and any character that isn’t a love interest is going to be getting pretty minimal screen time. Some of them are basically only in one chapter. But our cultural biases mean readers will assume every character is white unless otherwise specified, even though that’s unrealistic for the setting. It would stick out too much if I gave that kind of experiential anecdote for each one and then didn’t actually make them more of a focus of the story. I think. Maybe.

I generally stick to context clues, although that can be less declarative. I also write dialogue-heavy stuff about relatively sardonic characters, though, so generally a character with focus on them is going to say "well yeah I'm X or Y" if someone says something gormless that it applies to, IE "I can't believe the cops would do that," or whatever else.

Yes your genre is very different haha. I’m trying to write an escapist romcom. I don’t really want to make my audience think about police violence. Going for Talia Hibbert vibes where marginalized people just get to be happy for once

I also really dislike overtly describing weight or some aspects of build, so I tend to indicate via how they interact with the environment, how the environment interacts with them, how they relate to others, etc. that usually leaves it within a loose range, though, so that's probably less useful for something like race. My characters are often ciphers in some ways unless/until another perspective character observes them.